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Unicorn Hunt: Dragon Sacrifice by =eldestmuse:iconeldestmuse:



They say the best way to find a unicorn is to need one. The spoilt nobles' sons who hunt them have never needed anything but a solid spanking in their lives, so they take girls like me to play the bait. The petty cruelty of it makes me weep.

They have tied me to a tree with ropes that dig into my skin like thorns, but my tears are silent. I will not cry out for rescue, no matter how jagged the bark. My fear will not be the lure that leads another honorable savior to his death.

The nobles say that the unicorns are unnatural, their magic an affront to what should be, but they do not object to the brownies who wash their clothes nor the succubae who come to them in the night. They hate only that which they cannot control.

A wish for freedom, release—an honest desire, but a doomed one. I focus my thoughts and know that if I wish to be free, they will untie me when a unicorn falls at my feet—and hand me a tidy sum of gold, besides. The young ones do it for the fun, to see my impotent hatred as I take my pay and know my complicity in the destruction of something beautiful and pure. They do not care about the philosophies of their elders.

I may starve first—my stomach grumbles—but I will not doom another for my own sake. There are other women like me, women who will be chosen in my stead. My defiance accomplishes nothing save to assuage my guilt. I could not live with myself if I let them use me.

I hear a sound and my heart sinks—what have I done? My mind is addled from days in pain. Have I called one of the poor creatures to me? I hope with all my heart that I have not, that the twang of iron quarrels released from the strings of bows will not be the next noise that comes to my ears.

A man stands before me though I did not notice his arrival. There is no spiral horn between his brows, and I feel nothing but relief until my curiosity gets the better of me; what human male would dare defy the nobility?

It does not matter; they cannot see his face. The arrow is released, and I watch it approach with my eyes wide and horrified, though some small part of me is amazed that I can feel anything at all.

It bounces. He turns, and I see the tear in his shirt. There are scales—cobalt blue and beautiful—instead of skin. A dragon has come for me, and a laugh tears its way from my throat. They set me here as bait, but instead I shall serve my people as a sacrifice, and there is nothing the nobles can do to stop me. I shall have my wish—my death will serve a purpose, a purpose greater than I could have wished.

I cannot see his eyes, but I imagine they are reptile-cold and merciless as he dismisses the boys and turns back to me. He unties me and his scales extend outward from beneath his clothes like wings.

No unicorns will die because of me. I feel nothing but relief as he lifts me into the sky, though I know from stories handed down from my ancestors that only horrors await me at the end of this flight. I do not care.

Those horrors may affect me, but they will not weigh upon my conscience.
©2009-2010 =eldestmuse
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Author's Comments

A short story, inspired by:

>> The unicorn, through its intemperance and not knowing how to control itself, for the love it bears to fair maidens forgets its ferocity and wildness; and laying aside all fear it will go up to a seated damsel and go to sleep in her lap, and thus the hunters take it.

>> The story of Saint George, in which a town in North Africa is plagued by the depredations of a dragon who demands that the townsfolk offer up a virgin for it to devour on a regular basis. The dragon is usually interpreted as a metaphor for Satan and/or pagan beliefs.

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:iconyohkai:
This was absolutely amazing! :wow:

I love how in such a short space you have established the feel of the world as well as the "level" of magic present. I suppose the only thing I could have to offer is that perhaps more description of where they are as well as bringing in more of the senses.

I really like your word choice and especially your simile of the ropes.

One thing that I wonder is the use of succubae? As opposed to succubi?

I would love if this piece were continued. Like a series of short stories. Maybe he intended to save her, not eat her. ;P

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:iconunhealthyobsession:
Love it, especially the description of the dragon.

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:iconsquanpie:
I like this one. The world is very quickly established in a way that doesn't leave the reader having to skim over info dumps.

I also like the ending - an interesting way to escape the situation - although maybe the reactions of the hunters could have been described a little as well, to give a little more idea about the reputation of dragons.

If you do plan to carry this on, I'd suggest that the dragon doesn't save her. if she has to be saved, please try to avoid that cliche, and have something else rescue her from the dragon. if the dragon has to be good, then let him find her later and maybe rescue her again.

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:iconeldestmuse:
I'm glad you enjoyed the short, though I don't think I'll be continuing it any further; I rather enjoy the ambiguity of the ending. You're probably right about the ways it could be expanded internally, though, so thank you :)

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:iconeldestmuse:
He's pretty similar to the dragon in the Whitesmith series, really, except for not being fae :D

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=eldestmuse, formerly ~ladyofx
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:iconeldestmuse:
I like the sound of "succubae" more than "succubi" even if it's not technically proper, is all. I probably won't continue this, though--I have too many other projects to juggle, and I enjoy the ambiguity of the ending.

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:iconyohkai:
Aww, well that's ok, this story is fantastic enough as it is. :D

And succubae is technically a correct usage, it's just archaic is all. If the sounding of it is all that you wanted then that satisfies my curiosity. xP

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:iconeldestmuse:
:heart:

My firefox spellchecker insists that succubae is incorrect though *laugh*

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:iconyohkai:
Same here. Though I am amazed at some of the words it doesn't recognized at times. I can't think of one but every time I get it I'm like, "Oh come on!" xP

Again, great piece. :hug:

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