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The Prophecy of The Forbidden Prologue

A scream pierced the night air. A young man growled and turned, looking around. "Carol!" His voice was deep and held only a slight hint of worry. "Where are you?" He heard a muffled cry as Carol tried to say something, but her voice was cut off. It made it harder for him to locate her.

"Damn it." He strode off in the direction he believed the scream to have come from.

His worry wasn't for Carol, not at all. The minor amount of concern he felt was for his child; Carol was merely a tool. She was almost due, the reason for his uneasiness and focus on finding her. If anything were to happen, it would not be good.

Another scream pierc
The Prophecy of The Forbidden
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You may want to consider tightening up the writing. For instance with your hook, "pierced through" is redundant; pierced means to go t...

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The Company of a Good Friend. I was in the pub talking with my friend. We touched on many things, football, politics and news. But I had an idea what he really wanted to talk about; he wanted to talk about my best friend.

Eventually after an age he got round to it, hesitant at first - and in a whispered voice, he asked me how Death had become my friend.

So, I explained how I'd sent out an invitation, by post of course, inviting Death over for nothing more than a cup of tea, a chat and possibly a game or two of Chess. Naturally I'd been laughed at by people when they'd found out what I'd done, but the laughter stopped when the following Friday, Death turned up on my door
The Company of a Good Friend.
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:Wave: I think your hook could use a little work. To be verbs ("I was...") always trigger my active/passive sensor and even when they ...

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-Literature Contest- Forbidden (Reminder + More)Hello~

I was planning on waiting a while before starting this; but I decided to start now.

This will be my first contest, and I hope dearly that it goes well.
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I think I'm back.

Score one for #WriteRoom being awesome, I found a group I'm interested in: #ScreamPrompts

I'm going to keep working on my novel (currently THE GENOCIDE DRAFT, which is science fiction for a big bang, but I'm totally still into HINGES OF HELL, EXILE, & THE TOWER OF NINE), but it'll give me something to work on at work when I hit a research roadblock or something or need a change of pace!
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Mood: Joy *Peris-Productions Apr 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Cheers for favouriting my poem, really appreciate it! Take care :D
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Happy one-more-revolution-around-the-sun day!

I hope you're keeping well!
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A belated thank you :)

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No one has left a comment since mine last year?

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